tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-786207835641480928.post5073209285304346937..comments2024-03-28T12:59:41.910-04:00Comments on NeverEnding Story: Butterfly Dream: Winter Solitude Haiku by Neal WhitmanChen-ou Liu, 劉鎮歐http://www.blogger.com/profile/06235248170011255532noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-786207835641480928.post-31400145255780002182014-03-17T09:45:58.986-04:002014-03-17T09:45:58.986-04:00Hi! Rita:
I enjoyed reading your haiku, whose L3 ...Hi! Rita:<br /><br />I enjoyed reading your haiku, whose L3 enhances a sense of aloneness.<br /><br />Thanks for sharing. <br /><br />Chen-ouChen-ou Liu, 劉鎮歐https://www.blogger.com/profile/06235248170011255532noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-786207835641480928.post-59947555841395229612014-03-17T07:58:37.131-04:002014-03-17T07:58:37.131-04:00One of my haiku which deals with the same topic:
...One of my haiku which deals with the same topic:<br /><br /><br /><br />winter solitude-<br />only a sparrow <br />to share my meal<br /><br />-Rita Odeh, tinywords, 2007Rita Odehhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01201493655746508261noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-786207835641480928.post-52950220581934114162014-03-16T08:12:35.656-04:002014-03-16T08:12:35.656-04:00Ls 1&2 indicate the speaker's state of min...Ls 1&2 indicate the speaker's state of mind while L3, especially the concluding word, solitude (not loneliness), enhances the tone and mood of the poem.<br /><br />Neal's well-crafted haiku reminds me of one of Basho's haiku that deal with this similar topic:<br /><br />Winter solitude--<br />in a world of one color<br />the sound of wind.<br /><br />translated by Robert Hass Chen-ou Liu, 劉鎮歐https://www.blogger.com/profile/06235248170011255532noreply@blogger.com