tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-786207835641480928.post6991888912846326933..comments2024-03-28T12:59:41.910-04:00Comments on NeverEnding Story: One Man's Maple Moon: Family Photos Tanka by Simon HansonChen-ou Liu, 劉鎮歐http://www.blogger.com/profile/06235248170011255532noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-786207835641480928.post-68276319754291059942017-03-12T19:24:42.446-04:002017-03-12T19:24:42.446-04:00The comparison (or analogy) between ashes' sto...The comparison (or analogy) between ashes' stories of fire and life stories conveyed through family photos is visually and emotionally effective, but I wonder if the following version might work better in terms of tanka poetics:<br /><br />flicking through<br />family photographs<br />dad reminds me<br />ashes<br />have their stories of fire (having the most weight)Chen-ou Liu, 劉鎮歐https://www.blogger.com/profile/06235248170011255532noreply@blogger.com