tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-786207835641480928.post7811405195457238968..comments2024-03-28T12:59:41.910-04:00Comments on NeverEnding Story: Butterfly Dream: Eucharist of Rain Haiku by Carole JohnstonChen-ou Liu, 劉鎮歐http://www.blogger.com/profile/06235248170011255532noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-786207835641480928.post-49875780185824018422014-07-14T09:23:09.061-04:002014-07-14T09:23:09.061-04:00Marion:
I'll publish a "To the Lighthous...Marion:<br /><br />I'll publish a "To the Lighthouse" post to provide the aesthetic and historical context of 'Ichibutsu Shitate' and haiku examples.<br /><br />As for the poem, I wonder if a new verb, "walk," might work better "drive."<br /><br />Thanks for your close reading and for sharing your thought.<br /><br />Chen-ou<br /><br /><br /><br />Chen-ou Liu, 劉鎮歐https://www.blogger.com/profile/06235248170011255532noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-786207835641480928.post-57722627297362239982014-07-13T15:42:40.259-04:002014-07-13T15:42:40.259-04:00I really enjoyed Carole's haiku, Chen-ou.
As...I really enjoyed Carole's haiku, Chen-ou. <br /><br />As a Roman Catholic, I found line 2 particularly striking as 'eucharist' immediately made me think of the consecrated host, or bread, that is served during the sacrament of communion and I wondered how one could drive into this. But when combined with line 3, I considered how driving into a downpour might introduce the notion of being immersed in or communing with nature. <br /><br />I also found your explanation of the term 'Ichibutsu Shitate' very interesting as I had never come across it before. Without this information I might have mistaken the haiku as a run-on sentence and I'm not sure I would know the difference.<br /><br />marion<br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-786207835641480928.post-9155128148207301422014-07-13T11:26:52.575-04:002014-07-13T11:26:52.575-04:00Technically speaking, this is a good example of &q...Technically speaking, this is a good example of "Ichibutsu Shitate" (one-scene/image/theme/object haiku), a "single-object poem, which [focuses] on a single topic and in which the [haiku flows] smoothly from start to finish, without leap or gap found in the "composition poem" (that reads a poem with two juxtaposed images/topics...) (Haruo Shirane, Traces of Dreams Traces of Dreams Landscape, Cultural Memory, and the Poetry of Basho, p. 111). <br /><br />In Carole's well-crafted haiku, L3 holds the surprise of the poem.<br /><br />And thematically/theologically speaking, read in the context of Pentecostalism (especially, of the Latter Rain Movement), the rain in L3, which signifies the pouring out God's spirit, adds spiritual/religious depth to the poem, gaining added poignancy.<br />Chen-ou Liu, 劉鎮歐https://www.blogger.com/profile/06235248170011255532noreply@blogger.com