tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-786207835641480928.post8405659599231351024..comments2024-03-28T12:59:41.910-04:00Comments on NeverEnding Story: One Man's Butterfly Dream: Apricots Haiku by Gordana S. RadovanovicChen-ou Liu, 劉鎮歐http://www.blogger.com/profile/06235248170011255532noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-786207835641480928.post-35375528421058701342014-04-12T08:25:04.276-04:002014-04-12T08:25:04.276-04:00L1 sets the theme of the poem while Gordana's ...L1 sets the theme of the poem while Gordana's effective use of synaesthesia in Ls 2&3 enhances the tone and mood. <br /><br />By the way, the order of lines in this haiku is important. A flipped version below doesn't work well:<br /><br />Fragrance of dried apricots<br />in a snowy morning.<br />Longing for summer.<br /><br />It's mainly because the new L3 reads more like an expository line.<br /><br />Chen-ouChen-ou Liu, 劉鎮歐https://www.blogger.com/profile/06235248170011255532noreply@blogger.com