tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-786207835641480928.post6480955435351213297..comments2024-03-28T12:59:41.910-04:00Comments on NeverEnding Story: Butterfly Dream: Songbird Haiku by Peter JastermskyChen-ou Liu, 劉鎮歐http://www.blogger.com/profile/06235248170011255532noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-786207835641480928.post-59561188987601637152018-06-19T09:38:41.646-04:002018-06-19T09:38:41.646-04:00Peter skillfully employs the technique of "re...Peter skillfully employs the technique of "register shift" to indicate a "sudden irruptive shift" in the perceptual landscape of this nature haiku. And thematically, emotionally, and technically speaking, I think the haiku might work better in the form of a one-liner (without "..." )because of its quick pace:<br /><br />paths crossing a songbird becomes the windChen-ou Liu, 劉鎮歐https://www.blogger.com/profile/06235248170011255532noreply@blogger.com