Poetic Musings: Bombs and Storks Haiku by Daniela Misso

bombs fall

in a child's eyes

storks flying

Third Place, indianKUKAI, 37

Daniela Misso

Commentary: Enhanced by the effective use of a pivot, L2, the contrasts between L1 and L3 are timely and poignantly effective.

And the choice of the POV of an innocent and defenseless child adds emotional weight and psychological depth to the haiku.

When evaluated in the context of European folklore or now global pop cartoon culture, storks are often associated with new beginnings, fertility, and the arrival of babies; it's mainly because of their return from wintering in Africa to nest on village roofs in the spring.

Therefore, the symbolic significance of "L3, storks flying (away), " increases the negative impact of L1.