English Original
not quite goodbye --
an ocean beats
against the rocks
Modern Haiku, 40:3, 2009
Peggy Willis Lyles
Chinese Translation (Traditional)
尚未告別 ...
一片汪洋大海
拍打著岩石
Chinese Translation (Simplified)
尚未告别 ...
一片汪洋大海
拍打着岩石
Bio Sketch
Peggy Willis Lyles was born in Summerville, South Carolina, on September 17, 1939. She died in Tucker, Georgia on September 3, 2010. A former English professor, she was a leading haiku writer for over 30 years -- helping bring many readers and writers into the haiku community.
L1, "not quite goodbye" (and yet eventually farewell), sets the tone and mood while the beating sound of Ls 2&3 (an "ocean," not waves, beating against the rocks), enhanced by the use of the cinematic zoom-out technique, adds emotional weight to this goodbye haiku.
ReplyDeleteAnd it might be interesting to do a comparative reading of my haiku below:
Pacific waves
lapping blue at the shore ...
alone with my shadow
Revision, Cattails, January 2016