English Original
smelling of himself,
grass, and sunshine
the puppy
Alone Tonight, 1998
Larry Kimmel
Chinese Translation (Traditional)
聞起他自己的氣味,
青草, 和陽光的氣息
小狗
Chinese Translation (Simplified)
闻起他自己的气味,
青草, 和阳光的气息
小狗
Bio Sketch
Larry Kimmel lives quietly in the hills of western Massachusetts. His most recent books are shards and dust (cherita), outer edges (tanka) and thunder and apple blossoms (haiku).
Combining "himself, grass, and sunshine" in Ls 1&2 instantly creates a relatable, warm smell, and saving "the puppy" for L 3 shifts the reader's perspective and completes the picture effectively.
ReplyDeleteThis heartwarming captures a vivid, sensory moment in very few words.