high school reunion
the same antagonists
vie to be first...
lorikeets squabble
on the bird bath edge
Ribbons, 10:1, Winter 2014
Marilyn Humbert
Chinese Translation (Traditional)
高中同學聚會
同樣的對手
競相爭第一 ...
戲水槽邊
吸蜜鸚鵡在鬥嘴
Chinese Translation (Simplified)
高中同学聚会
同样的对手
竞相争第一 ...
戏水槽边
吸蜜鹦鹉在鬥嘴
Bio Sketch
Marilyn
Humbert lives in the Northern Suburbs of Sydney NSW surrounded by bush.
Her pastimes include writing free verse poetry, tanka, tanka prose and
related genre. She is the leader of Bottlebrush Tanka Group and member
of the Huddle and Bowerbird Tanka Groups. Her tanka appears in
Australian and international journals.
A simile is well established between the two parts of the poem. Marilyn's relatable tanka reminds me of her another poem using the same image of a bird bath edge, but with a different focus:
ReplyDeleteon the edge
of the birdbath
a mudlark
sinks into his reflection
i turn into my shadow
Atlas Poetica, 14, Spring 2013
Both of her tanka are our Today's Food for Thought
One more comment:
ReplyDeleteMarilyn's tanka above could be read as a solo somonka:
high school reunion
the same antagonists
vie to be first...
lorikeets squabble
on the bird bath edge
on the edge
of the birdbath
a mudlark
sinks into his reflection
i turn into my shadow
For more info. about somonka, see my "To the Lighthouse" post, titled "Somonka, A Pair of Corresponsive Tanka," which can be accessed at http://neverendingstoryhaikutanka.blogspot.ca/2014/07/to-lighthouse-somonka-pair-of.html