Sunday, November 8, 2015

Butterfly Dream: Softer Grass Haiku by S.M. Abeles

English Original

softer grass
in the retelling
we are barefoot

Acorn, 31, Fall 2013

S.M. Abeles


Chinese Translation (Traditional)

柔軟的草地
在複述故事時
我們赤著腳

Chinese Translation (Simplified)

柔软的草地
在複述故事时
我们赤著脚


Bio Sketch

S.M. Abeles lives and writes in Washington, D.C.  He composes poems on dog walks and train rides, and elsewhere when the moment strikes.  His work appears frequently in the usual haiku and tanka journals, and he posts at least one new poem daily on his website, The Empty Sky
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3 comments:

  1. Chen-ou Liu, 劉鎮歐November 8, 2015 at 9:14 AM

    The setting, theme, and tone of the poem emotionally effectively construct a "[story]world of our own."

    Technically speaking, "barefoot" in L3 provides a scent link (in Basho's sense of the phrase) to L1, and thematically speaking, L2 adds affective appeals to the poem.

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  2. S.M. AbelesNovember 8, 2015 at 2:23 PM

    Thanks so much Chen-ou, always my delight.

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  3. AnonymousNovember 9, 2015 at 6:16 AM

    Ah, how our stories are always better than the event itself and it never rains in our childhood memories of summer (well, here in Ireland anyway!)

    Lovely, Scott.

    marion

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