English Original
turn off radio
deep inhale-exhale-drive
focus on -- rain
Journeys: Getting Lost, 2015
Carole Johnston
Chinese Translation (Traditional)
關掉收音機
深深吸氣--呼氣--的駕車旅遊
全心全意地關注--雨
Chinese Translation (Simplified)
关掉收音机
深深吸气--呼气--的驾车旅游
全心全意地关注--雨
Bio Sketch
Carole Johnston has been writing Japanese short form poetry for twelve years and has published haiku and tanka in various print and online journals. Her first chapbook, Journeys: Getting Lost, was published in 2015 by Finishing Line Press. Retired from teaching, she drives around writing poems about landscape. Visit her on Twitter (@morganabag) to read more of her poetry.
Ls 1&2 seem to depict a "meditative" road trip, then a shift, thematic and tonal, in L3 makes this journey haiku visually and emotionally fresh and highly relatable. And unexpected yet effective L3 enhances the "hai" aspect of the haiku.
ReplyDeleteAnd the following haiku included in the same collection could be read as a prequel:
I drive
into a eucharist
of rain