First English-Chinese Bilingual Haiku and Tanka Blog
L1 sets the context, seasonal and emotive, while Ls2 &3 describe the speaker's state of mind. Combined with the emotionally effective use of '...,' the shift (from the physical world to the inner one) adds psychological depth to the poem.
Intriguing. The 'voice in my mind' makes me want to know more. It is obviously a persistent voice if it is like the raindrops and perhaps sad...nice.marion
H! Marion:Yes, I agree with your concluding comment.This is a heartfelt haiku with a psychological bent.Chen-ou