English Original
brisk morning
I hesitate putting out
my cigarette
so she can pass
and I can follow
American Tanka, 16, 2006
Zane Parks
Chinese Translation (Traditional)
輕快的早晨
猶豫要不要熄掉
我的香煙
這樣她就可以從我身邊走過
然後我就可以跟隨她
Chinese Translation (Simplified)
轻快的早晨
犹豫要不要熄掉
我的香烟
这样她就可以从我身边走过
然后我就可以跟随她
Translation result
Bio Sketch
Zane Parks lives with his wife Bridget and cats Boaz and Miss Kitty on the gulf coast of Florida. He writes haiku, senryu, tanka and related forms. His books, tiny dropping and Journey are available at lulu.com.
Zane's tanka effectively builds, line by line, to an unexpected yet thematically and emotionally effective ending that reveals the theme of smoking and sex
ReplyDeleteAnd it reminds me of the following tanka:
nothing works
not even a smile
tonight
three women walk
thru my cigar smoke
Biding Time: Selected Poems 2001-2013
H. Gene Murtha