neon lights
fade in dawn's lilac glow
on the footpath
clubbers, drug-fucked
in bedraggled revelry
NeverEnding Story, May 3, 2026
Christine Judd
Commentary: This tanka is a quintessential example of urban onihishigitei. By intentionally shattering the "elegant" expectations of the form—traditionally reserved for nature or romance—Judd replaces classical refinement with the visceral grit of the street.
The tanka sets a "poetic trap" in L2 with "dawn's lilac glow." This soft imagery evokes a classic aesthetic, only to be "quelled" by the spatial descent to the "footpath" in L 3. This vertical drop from the sky to the concrete mirrors the physical and chemical "comedown" of the subjects.
The compound "drug-fucked" in L 4 is the definitive urban onihishigitei move. The diction is intentionally jarring and stripped of any romantic veneer, forcing the reader to confront the raw exhaustion of urban excess. This linguistic violence is sustained by the percussive weight of "bedraggled revelry" in L5—an oxymoron that perfectly captures the messy, depleted tail-end of the night.
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