sunlit pew
I rest for a moment
in my childhood faith
NeverEnding Story, February 10, 2019
Jacquie Pearce
Commentary: Juxtaposed with "sunlit pew" and "childhood faith," Jacquie's haiku is tightly structured with an undercurrent of nostalgia for something innocent/pure and yet lost. And L2, "rest for a moment" effectively adds emotional weight and psychological depth to the haiku.
And my confessional haiku below could be read as a sequel/response poem to Jacquie's:
in and out
of the confessional
winter light
The Heron's Nest, XX, March 2018
a hole in the light: The Red Moon Anthology of English-Language Haiku 2018
Jacquie's Reply, February 21, 2019
I like the way the two haiku work together, focusing on the presence of light (rather than people) moving through the churches (and perhaps moving through memories).
