Tuesday, June 19, 2018

Butterfly Dream: Songbird Haiku by Peter Jastermsky

English Original

paths crossing ...
a songbird becomes
the wind

Peter Jastermsky

Chinese Translation (Traditional)

路途交錯 ...

Chinese Translation (Simplified)


Bio Sketch

His pen silent for 30 years, Peter Jastermsky reemerged 2 years ago as a writer of Japanese short-form poetry. His work has appeared in many journals, including Failed Haiku, Haibun Today, The Cherita, and KYSO  Flash. Peter and his family live in Southern California, where he works as a licensed counselor.

1 comment:

  1. Peter skillfully employs the technique of "register shift" to indicate a "sudden irruptive shift" in the perceptual landscape of this nature haiku. And thematically, emotionally, and technically speaking, I think the haiku might work better in the form of a one-liner (without "..." )because of its quick pace:

    paths crossing a songbird becomes the wind