English Original
astro lab
a boy stretches himself
to the stars
Prune Juice, March, 2019
Srinivasa Rao Sambangi
Chinese Translation (Traditional)
天文實驗室
一個男孩伸手
指向群星
Chinese Translation (Simplified)
天文实验室
一个男孩伸手
指向群星
Bio Sketch
Srinivasa Rao Sambangi, a Master Black Belt in Six Sigma, is currently working in a pharma company in Hyderabad, India. His haiku are regularly published in all the leading haiku journals
The twist/surprise ending, L3, makes this haiku visually and emotionally effective. And the thematic significance of the "stars," the symbol of a so far away and yet so close dream of being an astrologist or even an astronaut (as implied by the setting of L1), adds one more layer of meaning to the haiku.
ReplyDeleteAnd it might be interesting to do a thematic comparison reading of my haiku below:
the top
of the Ferris wheel ...
stars and a dream
NeverEnding Story, December 6, 2017
For more examples, see To the Lighthouse: Twist/Surprise Ending, accessed at https://neverendingstoryhaikutanka.blogspot.com/2021/06/to-lighthouse-twistsurprise-ending.html
Dear Chen-ou,
ReplyDeleteThank you for publishing chinese version also for the nice commentary on my haiku
Srinivasa
astro laboratorij / dječak se proteže / do zvijezda .....croatian.........and astro labaratorij / dečak se proteže / do zvezda .....serbien
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