English Original
dawn combo
the pop of my porridge
with birdsong
Songbirds, 2022
Adjei Agyei-Baah
Chinese Translation (Traditional)
黎明組合餐
我的稀飯的啵啵聲
伴隨著鳥鳴聲
Chinese Translation (Simplified)
黎明组合餐
我的稀饭的啵啵声
伴随着鸟鸣声
Bio Sketch
Adjei Agyei-Baah (June 29, 1977 -- December 18, 2023) was the co-founder of the Africa Haiku Network and The Mamba and author of afriku: haiku and Senryui from Ghana, 2016, Finding the Other Door, 2021 and Scaring Crow, 2022.
Unexpected yet multi-sensorily evocative L3 not only makes this haiku deliciously fresh and emotionally effective, but also successfully strips off this commerciality of "combo," purifying and beautifying it with a dawn chorus.
ReplyDeleteAnd my tanka below could be read as its sequel:
birdsongs
at morning lightfall
alone
in the thatched hut
of an everyday mind
Special Commendation for Embodying Sanford-Style
2021 Sanford Goldstein International Tanka Contest
A real haiku’s gotta be as simple as porridge and yet make you see the real thing
Delete-- Jack Kerouac, "The Dharma Bums, " p.59