Poetic Musings: Leaf Pile Haiku by Scott Mason

leaf pile raker

leaf pile kicker

two autumns

   

Third Place, 2016 Porad Haiku Award 

            

Scott Mason

               

Commentary: Thematically and structurally speaking, Scott's haiku alludes to the following one:

I go

      you stay --

two autumns 

Masaoka Shiki (often wrongly attributed to Yosa Buson)

It's easy for readers, who have front yards/gardens or backyards needed to be cleaned up fallen leaves and blossoms during autumn, to visualize this scene: Dad is out to rake leaves/L1,  while his kid(s) follow(s) behind, kicking through the leaf pile/L2 and scattering the leaves to the autumn wind.

And as time continues to move forward, the next autumn will eventually arrive/L3. The same things, raking and kicking leaves/Ls 1&2, will happen again.

Here is my response/much serious😓 haiku:

rounds of shovelling snow,

                rounds of clearing windrows ...

two blizzard dumps

FYI: CBC News, Feb. 17: Toronto, Montreal tackle towering snow piles after back-to-back storms