dawn moon
quiet mind, quiet
embers in the ash
Mann Library’s Daily Haiku, May 9, 2014
Marian Olson
Commentary: Enhanced by the midline break, the use of repetition of "quite," when juxtaposed with visually evocative and symbolically rich images of "dawn moon" and "embers in the ash," is fresh and psychologically effective, successfully conveying a sense of "contemplative calmness."
And it might be interesting to do a thematic comparison reading of my haiku below:
hazy day moon
alone, awake with the weight
of memory
PoemHunter, Feb. 17, 2013
The past is never dead. It's not even past.
― William Faulkner, "Requiem for a Nun"
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