shift change
fried chicken and exhaust
on the warm breeze
DailyHaiga, 10 January 2017
Ignatius Fay
Commentary: This is a fine example of shasei (sketch from life) haiku, infused with multi-sensorily evocative imagery (smell of fried chicken mixed with musty and smoky exhaust on the warm breeze, Ls 2&3), about quick-pace drive-through window service (as implied from the juxtaposition of L1 and L2).
And this is also a good example of "less-means-more" haiku. What's left unsaid, such as negative impacts on worker health and well-being due to increased stress, physical strain, and potential for errors or injuries constantly occurring in a culture of speed, at least as potent as what's stated/indicated in the haiku, such as "oily smell" of fried chicken mixed with "musty and smoky" exhaust.
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