English Original
frost covered weeds
grandpa’s tractor
cough, cough, coughs
Randy Brooks
Chinese Translation (Traditional)
凍霜覆蓋的雜草
爺爺的拖拉機
發出咳, 咳, 咳的聲音
Chinese Translation (Simplified)
冻霜覆盖的杂草
爷爷的拖拉机
发出咳, 咳, 咳的声音
Bio Sketch
Dr. Randy Brooks is Professor of English Emeritus at Millikin University where he teaches courses on haiku and tanka. He and his wife, Shirley Brooks, are publishers of Brooks Books and co-editors of Mayfly haiku magazine. His most recent books include Walking the Fence: Selected Tanka and The Art of Reading and Writing Haiku: A Reader Response Approach.
L1 sets the scene and mood while the use of "palilogia" (the repetition of a single word or phrase in immediate succession for emphasis) in L 3 effectively creates an onomatopoeic effect, greatly enhancing the audio-emotional aspect of the haiku.
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