English Original
I lay down
all my heavy packages
autumn moon
Haikun Studio, 1991
Patricia Donegan
Chinese Translation (Traditional)
我放下
所有的重物
秋月
Chinese Translation (Simplified)
我放下
所有的重物
秋月
Bio Sketch
Patricia Donegan (1945 -- 2023) led a life of creative exploration, meditation, writing, translating and teaching haiku, and teaching haiku. Three of her most famous books of haiku Love Haiku: Japanese Poems of Yearning, Passion & Remembrance (co-translated with Yoshie Ishibashi), Haiku Mind: 108 Poems to Cultivate Awareness and Open Your Heart, and Chiyo-ni Woman Haiku Master (co-translated with Yoshie Ishibashi). In 2017 she was named the honorary curator of the American Haiku Archives.
“Heavy packages” in L2 juxtaposed with “autumn moon” in L3 creates an emotionally effective contrast between burden and serenity.
ReplyDeleteAnd the shift turns from physical weight to a quiet seasonal image feels like a release.