English Original
old mill
a wagonload
of fallen leaves
Haikuniverse, Feb. 24 2017
Garry Eaton
Chinese Translation (Traditional)
老舊的碾米廠
一貨車
的落葉
Chinese Translation (Simplified)
老旧的碾米厂
一货车
的落叶
Bio Sketch
Garry Eaton was a Canadian poet from British Columbia. He started writing haiku in 2006 and was published occasionally in the major haiku magazines. He volunteered as the digital librarian for The Haiku Foundation Digital Library.
The shift, thematic, emotional, and visual, in L3 enhances the bleak scene of an abandoned mill [town?!] "synecdochically depicted" in this shasei haiku.
ReplyDeleteThe following haiku could be read as a prequel to Garry's:
Deletemill race
spring sunshine
pushing the wheel
A Dictionary of Haiku, 2013
Jane Reichhold