Showing posts with label Kala Ramesh. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Kala Ramesh. Show all posts

Sunday, July 26, 2026

Biting NOT Barking: Charcoal Smog Haiku by Kala Ramesh

English Original

charcoal smog
chuk-chuk rail gaadi 
                darkens
into its noise
 
Frogpond, 47:2, Spring/Summer 2024

Kala Ramesh 


Chinese Translation (Traditional) 

木炭煙霧
楚克, 楚克, 火車引擎的聲音
                  漸漸變得低沉
化為它自己的噪音

Chinese Translation (Simplified) 

木炭烟雾
楚克, 楚克, 火车引擎的声音
                 渐渐变得低沉
化为它自己的噪音


Bio Sketch

Kala Ramesh is the Founder and Director of Triveni Haikai India, the Founder and Managing Editor of haikuKATHA Journal, an anthologist, and an external faculty member of Symbiosis International University Pune, where she taught a 60-hour haikai course from 2012 to 2021 — a first in India. She has organised eight major haiku festivals and to bring haiku into everyday spaces, Kala has initiated several successful projects in India.

Tuesday, July 7, 2026

One Man's Maple Moon: Fruit Tanka by Kala Ramesh

English Original

mother laments
being old and bent
I see her
as a curved branch
laden with fruit  


Kala Ramesh 


Chinese Translation (Traditional) 

母親感嘆
年老體衰
我瞅見她
如同一條彎曲的枝條
掛滿果實

Chinese Translation (Simplified) 

母亲感叹
年老体衰
我瞅见她
如同一条弯曲的枝条
挂满果实


Bio Sketch

Kala Ramesh is the Founder and Director of Triveni Haikai India, the Founder and Managing Editor of haikuKATHA Journal, an anthologist, and an external faculty member of Symbiosis International University Pune, where she taught a 60-hour haikai course from 2012 to 2021 — a first in India. She has organised eight major haiku festivals and to bring haiku into everyday spaces, Kala has initiated several successful projects in India.

Monday, November 24, 2025

One Man's Maple Moon: Family Album Tanka by Kala Ramesh

English Original

flipping through
     the family album 
grandma’s smile
trying to shield the hurt
her eyes give away

Cattails, Spring 2024

Kala Ramesh 


Chinese Translation (Traditional) 

翻閱整本的
        家庭相簿
奶奶的微笑
試圖掩飾過去的傷痛
但是她的眼神卻洩漏了一切

Chinese Translation (Simplified) 

翻阅整本的
        家庭相簿
奶奶的微笑
试图掩饰过去的伤痛
但是她的眼神却泄漏了一切


Bio Sketch

Kala Ramesh is the Founder and Director of Triveni Haikai India, the Founder and Managing Editor of haikuKATHA Journal, an anthologist, and an external faculty member of Symbiosis International University Pune, where she taught a 60-hour haikai course from 2012 to 2021 — a first in India. She has organised eight major haiku festivals and to bring haiku into everyday spaces, Kala has initiated several successful projects in India.

Saturday, May 24, 2025

One Man's Maple Moon: Truth Tanka by Kala Ramesh

English Original

truth lies
shrouded in Maya
and beneath the veil
once lifted
truth lies

Fire Pearls: Short Masterpieces of the Human Heart, 2006

Kala Ramesh 


Chinese Translation (Traditional) 

真相被籠罩
在瑪雅的陰影
一層面紗之下
一旦揭開
真理依然存在

Chinese Translation (Simplified) 

真相被笼罩
在玛雅的阴影
一层面纱之下
一旦揭开
真理依然存在


Bio Sketch

Kala Ramesh is the Founder and Director of Triveni Haikai India, the Founder and Managing Editor of haikuKATHA Journal, an anthologist, and an external faculty member of Symbiosis International University Pune, where she taught a 60-hour haikai course from 2012 to 2021 — a first in India. She has organised eight major haiku festivals and to bring haiku into everyday spaces, Kala has initiated several successful projects in India.

Sunday, March 16, 2025

Butterfly Dream: Sun-Drenched Song Haiku by Kala Ramesh

English Original

long after sunset
the cuckoo’s
sun-drenched song
  
Acorn, 52, Spring 2024

Kala Ramesh 


Chinese Translation (Traditional) 

日落後一段時間
一隻杜鵑
陽光浸潤的歌聲

Chinese Translation (Simplified) 

日落后一段时间
一只杜鹃
阳光浸润的歌声


Bio Sketch

Kala Ramesh is the Founder and Director of Triveni Haikai India, the Founder and Managing Editor of haikuKATHA Journal, an anthologist, and an external faculty member of Symbiosis International University Pune, where she taught a 60-hour haikai course from 2012 to 2021 — a first in India. She has organised eight major haiku festivals and to bring haiku into everyday spaces, Kala has initiated several successful projects in India.

Monday, July 8, 2024

One Man's Maple Moon: Meditation Camp Tanka by Kala Ramesh

English Original

meditation camp ...
ten days of silence
broken,
my thought-ridden mind
finds its loudspeaker again

Cattails, Spring 2024

Kala Ramesh 


Chinese Translation (Traditional) 

冥想營 ...
十天的沉默
打破了, 
我的萬千思緒
再次找到了它的擴音器

Chinese Translation (Simplified) 

冥想营 ...
十天的沉默
打破了,
我的万千思绪
再次找到了它的扩音器


Bio Sketch

Kala Ramesh is the Founder and Director of Triveni Haikai India, the Founder and Managing Editor of haikuKATHA Journal, an anthologist, and an external faculty member of Symbiosis International University Pune, where she taught a 60-hour haikai course from 2012 to 2021 — a first in India. She has organised eight major haiku festivals and to bring haiku into everyday spaces, Kala has initiated several successful projects in India.

Wednesday, April 24, 2024

Cool Announcement: A Freebie, the unseen arc by Kala Ramesh

My Dear Readers:

NeverEnding Story contributor, Kala Ramesh, had a free ebook out: the unseen arc, winner of The Snapshot Press Book Awards. Her collection of winning tanka is visually and emotionally arresting, and oftentimes thought-provoking. The following are the tanka selected for your reading pleasure.


Selected Tanka:

the night
all to myself
I imagine
the unseen arc
of the crescent moon

a sudden spurt
of warm feeling ...
              my blood 
        from a womb 
I knew nothing about

mother laments
being old and bent
I see her
as a curved branch
laden with fruit    

barefooted
I stand before god
my slippers
outside the temple gate
along with my ego


Happy Reading

Chen-ou           

Thursday, September 7, 2023

A Poet's Roving Thoughts: Tanka Flights

(Tanka Flights was first published in Ribbons, 10:3, Fall 2014 and reprinted here by kind permission of NeverEnding Story contributor, Kala Ramesh)

Tanka Flights by Kala Ramesh

I taught a thirty-hour haiku module to undergraduates at the Symbiosis International University (SIU) in February 2013.  When SIU asked me if I could run a 60-hour module for the next batch of students, I knew I had no option but to include tanka. Now I'm into my fourth stint with SIU and am clearer about how I like to teach tanka than when I started. However, it may be easier to teach this 1300-year-old art form, (originally known as waka), than to describe the methods I use! Often I find myself changing my methods to suit a particular group of students, as we do in Indian classical music concerts, when we gauge the pulse of the audience.

     wind swings
     across the lake's surface
     creating ripples ...
     my tanka students
     discuss syllable counts

Teaching an art form is never easy. One needs to give structural information and still leave “dreaming space” for each person’s originality and creativity so that by the end of the course, the student feels she has learnt something that will stay with her for the rest of her life. In developing a way to teach tanka, after having taught haiku, I realized there is a similarity in how the two forms handle the two images that are often central to the poem. The gap in the spark plug should neither be too wide nor too small— to get your motor vehicle moving you need just that right amount of space for the “spark” to happen! Something identical happens between images in tanka. I teach haiku and renku at the beginning of my course to help students learn how to stretch one image into two or into three lines, and then how to connect the two images, to bring about the spark. Understanding this skill, or call it a knack, helps students when they attempt a tanka.

I show my students examples of the classical structure first, composed of an upper verse (with three lines of 5, 7, and 5 sound units), and a lower verse (with two lines of 7 sound units each). Although contemporary tanka is not written with a 5/7/5/7/7 sound structure or even necessarily with a short, long, short, long, long form, I think it helps beginners to know the original length and form of this ancient art form. I never insist or ask my students to write tanka in 5/7/5/7/7 sound structure. 

I also teach that tanka, at its core, has a direct personal touch that conveys the poet's own experiences in life. More significant than the syllable count, is the weaving of two and in some rare cases three strong images together to unify the five lines and bring the poem to life. 

I also give my students the following general guidelines for writing tanka:

a. Follow the principle of “show, don't tell”
b. Avoid “abstract” words like the plague! [They can slip in one, though!]
c. Strive to make L 5 the strongest, most significant line.  
d. Try to stick to 21 to 24 sound units or (in English) syllables. Get away from “skinny” 
    tanka, which most often is nothing but haiku in a different garb!
e. Don't lose the musicality in the flow of the lines.  

I teach them to read their tanka aloud, and if they stumble over a word or line—I request them to change it!  This 1300-year-old art form was originally sung. 

I then discuss five possible ways, with examples, how to arrange the images in a tanka. 

1. The 2/3 or 3/2 image format: one image in two lines and another in three lines. I teach that this 2/3 or 3/2 arrangement should form the base as students learn the art of writing tanka. I ask them to write a few dozen 2/3, 3/2 tanka and practice putting each image into two or three lines. 

     my father sings
     all through the night …
     round notes
     smoothing the edge
     of darkness

—Susan Constable, American Tanka 23: January 2014
(A 2/3 divide)

    gently I tug
    the snake’s translucent skin
    free of the grass—
    more and more my hands
    resemble my mother’s

—Jenny Ward Angyal, American Tanka 22: June 2013 
(A 3/2 divide)


2. The pivot: Use line 3 as the pivot connecting the two parts of the poem. The pivot line may be read as part of the upper verse and/or part of the lower verse. The pivot is also referred to as the “hinge”, which swings both ways! 

   a single cicada
   ushers in the summer
   once again
   making the calendar
   one of empty squares

– Kala Ramesh, Notes From the Gean – June 2012

3. The 1/4 or 4/1 image format: I teach that this arrangement is difficult because if the student starts or ends with a fragment unless the 2nd image extends naturally into the remaining four lines, the poem feels as if portions have been added, just to make five lines . . . or to put it in simple words – it seems like a 3 line haiku has been extended into a tanka and that most often doesn’t work. 

   the stars long gone … 
   all that's left are the sighing
   gusts of wind 
   and my grieving heart
   pumping darkness

—Sonam Chhoki, A Hundred Gourds 2:3, June 2013 
(A clear-cut 1/4 image divide.) The “and” in L4 makes the second image run from Ls 2 to 5)

   blank squares
   in the crossword puzzle
   my brother left
   at the cancer clinic …
   answers we never find
 
—Kenneth Slaughter, 2012 TSA International Tanka Contest Winners
 (A clear-cut 4/1 image divide)


4. A three-image tanka: This format can feel overcrowded, but such poems can be successful. The 1st example is a 3 image with clear punctuation.

   I've this memory –
   riding my father's shoulders
   into the ocean,
   the poetry of things
   before I could speak

 —Michael McClintock, Tankaonline  http://www.tankaonline.com

   illusions ride
   on fast-fading rainbow
   somewhere there
   I let go of my childhood …
   I must have

—Kala Ramesh, Simply Haiku, summer 2010
(Here even without the punctuation, the three images are clear, Ls 1 & 2 – 1st image. Ls 3 & 4 – 2nd Image and L 5 is the 3rd image)


5. A sentence tanka: The poet can stretch one thought/image into five lines.  However, I feel this is difficult to write well because often it reads like a prose sentence. Unlike prose, the space at the end of each line and between the lines gives the poem its multi-layered flavour. In renku, John Carley called it the “white space”. 

   a hundred lies 
   just to cover 
   the first  
   his conscience
   allowed him to say
                                                                                                                                                                      —Kala Ramesh, Ribbons – autumn 2009

                                                      *** ***

Here are examples of tanka written by the students at the Symbiosis School for Liberal Arts (SSLA) after a four-hour instruction on how to write tanka. 

   moments of love
   left unattended ...
   we wait for 
   valentine’s day 
   to say, I love you 

—Akanksha Mansukhani
(2/3 divide)

   I’ve this memory—
   walking down the road
   planning my words
   then forgetting each one 
   when I see your face

—Priyanka Sutaria
(1/4 divide)

  fireworks
  take over the sky
  this evening
  a street dog waits
  begging to come indoor

—Adheip Rashida
(pivot - hinge door: L3)

 dying embers
 of a candle in the wind
 much like
 that initial spark in your eyes
 fading away to grey

—Maulik Dabholkar 
(sentence tanka)

 I against me -
 through sleepless nights
 an ever-raging battle
 over him who knows not
 my name

—Radhika Mohite
(1/4 divide)

 she glances
 in my direction
 with a smile
 playing on her lips …
 a portrait over the mantle

—Hana Masood 
(4/1 divide)


For me, tanka is tanka because of what it leaves unsaid. Yes, we follow this convention in haiku too, but in tanka, we have two extra lines to leave more unsaid!

Although English-language tanka does not need to use Japanese tools, the Japanese concept of ‘ma’ fits well with tanka. Ma (pronounced "maah") can be explained as the pure and, indeed, the essential void between all "things." The total lack of clutter, we could say! 

A very beautiful thing to remember is that writing tanka can become a way of life. When writing tanka, we relate to life and the relationships we encounter with each breath. A fleeting butterfly or a caustic remark from a person you know can both dig deep into our psychic. The music of language begins in tanka.

Tuesday, August 1, 2023

Butterfly Dream: River and Sea Haiku by Kala Ramesh

English Original

I dip my feet
in a river the river
joins the sea

Moongarlic, 4, May 2016

Kala Ramesh 


Chinese Translation (Traditional) 

我把雙腳浸入
河水中, 一條河
流入大海

Chinese Translation (Simplified) 

我把双脚浸入
河水中, 一条河
流入大海


Bio Sketch

Kala Ramesh has published more than one thousand poems comprising haiku, tanka, haibun, & renku in reputed journals and anthologies in Japan, Europe, UK, Australia, USA and India. Her work can be read in two prestigious publications: Haiku 21: an anthology of contemporary English-language Haiku (Modern Haiku Press, 2012) and Haiku in English - the First Hundred Years (W.W. Norton 2013). She enjoys teaching haiku and allied genres at the Symbiosis International University, Pune.

Friday, July 21, 2023

One Man's Maple Moon: Cicada Tanka by Kala Ramesh

English Original

a single cicada
ushers in the summer
once again
marking the calendar
one of empty squares

Notes From the Gean, June 2012

Kala Ramesh 


Chinese Translation (Traditional) 

一隻蟬
迎來了夏天
再一次
標記日曆中
的一個空方塊

Chinese Translation (Simplified) 

一只蝉
迎来了夏天
再一次
标记日历中
的一个空方块


Bio Sketch

Kala Ramesh has published more than one thousand poems comprising haiku, tanka, haibun, & renku in reputed journals and anthologies in Japan, Europe, UK, Australia, USA and India. Her work can be read in two prestigious publications: Haiku 21: an anthology of contemporary English-language Haiku (Modern Haiku Press, 2012) and Haiku in English - the First Hundred Years (W.W. Norton 2013). She enjoys teaching haiku and allied genres at the Symbiosis International University, Pune.

Monday, August 22, 2022

Poetic Musings: River Tanka by Kala Ramesh

is time always new   .?
then what was that river
that passed
by you yesterday
in which I'm standing now

the forest i know, 2021

Kala Ramesh

Commentary: Allusive/in response to Heraclitus' teaching on ever-present change as being the fundamental essence of the universe as stated in the following famous saying:

No man ever steps in the same river twice, for it's not the same river and he's not the same man.

Kala's thought-provoking tanka explores the concept of ever-changing time, L1 (is time always new   .?) in the context of a relationship: Ls 2-5, what was that river/that passed/by you yesterday/in which I'm standing now. If (the river of) time is ever-changing, then are we (you and I in ls 4&5) the same persons in the same relationship?

The tanka doesn't give an answer or a hint. However, the interesting punctuation marks at the end of L1 stirs the reader's imagination. First, a blank space lets time and the line flow onward. Then, a period stops the flow, followed immediately by a questioning of the full stop.

Sunday, July 31, 2022

Poetic Musings: Inside Out Tanka by Kala Ramesh

the aum
on our front doors
hers ornamental
and mine in plain wood
reveals us inside out

Skylark, 6:2, Winter 2018

Kala Ramesh

Commentary: This tanka of mine will demonstrate how link and shift and layering between images work to convey, in 17 words, something that defines who I am against the backdrop of culture... Let’s see where the breaks occur in this tanka. In lines 1 and 2, “aum” and “front doors” form the main keywords or setting — they situate the tanka, mise-en-scène, so to speak. Lines 3 and 4 cut away and go into the nature of the aum sign. Each line and image forms another layer (the montage effect) until we come to line 5, where I (the narrator) take you (the reader) into the cultural and geographical backdrop of my neighbor’s aum and mine: our different upbringings, how our inner worlds work. The shift in that last line, with its bit of disjunction, brings unity and completion to the poem...

--excerpted from "To the Lighthouse: Link and Shift: The Leap in Our Understanding by Kala Ramesh"

FYI: One of the most important Haidu symbols, "aum," symbolizes the Universe and the ultimate reality. 

Tuesday, May 17, 2022

Poetic Musings: River and Sea Haiku by Kala Ramesh

I dip my feet
in a river the river
joins the sea

Moongarlic, 4, May 2016

Kala Ramesh

Commentary: The way I see it, three totally different images weave in and out of a 12-word poem:

I dip my feet
in a river

in a river the river

the river
joins the sea

Think back to the linking equation mentioned earlier (verse C links to preceding verse B and shifts away from verse A). In this poem, we have the feet at one end of the equation (A) and the sea at the other (C). On a larger scale, one small life (feet) is being connected to something larger, the cosmos (sea), through the steady flow of existence (river). By overlapping, the images create the necessary resonance: The narrator and her feet don’t literally join the sea, but the resonance shows how everything is connected, in the same way that “petals on a wet, black bough” provide a new way to see the crowd’s faces in Ezra Pound’s famous “In a Station of the Metro”—another poem that relies on superposition for its impact.

Wednesday, May 12, 2021

Poetic Musings: Seed and Stars Tanka by Kala Ramesh

seeing the whole
blossom contained
in a seed
I look up to the sky
with all the stars

bottle rockets, 25, August 2011

Kala Ramesh

Commentary: There are two kinds of seeing -- with the mind's eyes (Ls 2&3) and with the naked eye (Ls 4&5) -- explored in Kala's visually evocative and thought-provoking tanka. The two parts of the tanka mutually enhance each other's tone and mood (Ls 1&5), and at the same time challenge readers to see with news eyes

The real voyage of discovery consists, not in seeking new landscapes, but in having new eyes. --  Marcel Proust, Remembrance of Things Past

Tuesday, December 1, 2020

Poetic Musings: Spiraling Thoughts Haiku by Kala Ramesh

a tornado spiraling thoughts to the sky 

Under the Basho, 2013

Kala Ramesh

Commentary: The link word acts as a media to create subtle images. Here, if we take out "thoughts", it would be a simple prosaic sentence. The word "thoughts" drives the inner urge of the reader to look up the sky and action-based spiraling of tornado for detail logical deliberation. Moreover, it can be classified as a classical monoku with multiple meanings... (excerpted from To the Lighthouse: Monoku: An Experiment with Minimalism in Haiku Literature by Pravat Kumar Padhy)

Friday, September 11, 2020

To the Lighthouse: Link and Shift

Link and Shift: The Leap in Our Understanding by Kala Ramesh

(first published in Contemporary Haibun Online, 16:2 and reprinted here by kind permission of NeverEnding Story contributor, Kala Ramesh)

Japan has given us a quintessential tool: link and shift, which allows us to say so much in few words. In each of the haikai genres — be it haiku, haibun, haiga, renku, tanka or tanka prose — this principle enables the poet to latch on to something bigger than each individual part, forming one organic whole.

The link and shift principle came into existence through renku, the collaborative verse form popularised by master Basho (and still practiced to perfection today). Renku is not a succession of individual verses; it is a sequence of dependencies — which is why linking verse C to the preceding verse (B) and shifting away from the one before it (verse A) works hand in glove for the progressive movement in renku. In their essay “Link and Shift: A Practical Guide to Renku Composition,” Tadashi Shôkan Kondô and William J. Higginson describe it this way:

“Link” (tsukeai) refers to the connections or relations between adjacent stanzas; “shift” (tenji) has to do with the diversity of topics and materials and the progression of the renku.

By linking and shifting, renku poets magically take the participants on a journey through space and time, seasons and human traits. But can we not say the same thing about haiku, tanka, haiga, haibun, and tanka prose? In different ways, all use link and shift as an organizing principle. When writing haiku, we link and shift between the two images that are juxtaposed; in tanka, between the upper kami-no-ku phrase and lower shimo-no-ku phrase; and in haibun and tanka prose, in the narration of the prose itself and then between the prose and the poem(s). Link and shift allows us to move a very short poem through “many” dimensions (Tadashi Shôkan Kondô and William J. Higginson), while also creating an incompleteness that powers it (Prof. Richard Gilbert of Kumamoto University).

To achieve that shift, haikai poets apply a variety of nuanced techniques: kire (the cut— allowing space, rest, and movement between images), juxtaposition, superposition of images that resonate, and disjunction. Like a house of cards, each technique leans on the others, but all come under the dynamic principle of link and shift. In this article, I want to explore these techniques and show how poets use them to tell a story, or part of a story, to a point where the reader steps in to bring it to completion.

The Techniques of Link and Shift—The How and Why

To begin, let’s look at two techniques used by filmmakers to tell a story. Mise-en-scène (pronounced meez-auhn-sen) is a French term that literally means “to put into scene” or “staging an action.” Anil Zankar, a professor at the Film & Television Institute of India in Pune, explains:

    At its simplest it could be defined as the art of combining the animate (the actors) and the inanimate (sets, costumes, properties, natural and other ambiance) elements to produce a cinematic scene. This usually includes set design, location, actors and their movements, costumes, make-up, sound, shot compositions, lighting. All these elements blend in the composition of a scene in a film. In other words, mise-en-scène is the capability of the director in making a harmonious whole out of the various parts.

Montage is another bit of film-world jargon. The dictionary defines it as “the technique of selecting, editing, and piecing together separate sections of film to form a continuous whole.” Isn’t this what we do when employing link and shift in our poems, piecing together and juxtaposing words and images rather than film ‘shots’?

This leads us to the Japanese technique of kire (the cut), which is so vital to the link-and-shift principle. Cutting creates spaces between two images, juxtaposing each to create something bigger than they could do alone. Uda Kiyoko, an influential figure in gendai (modern) haiku, describes cutting this way, in an interview she did with Prof. Gilbert:

    So, yes, haiku “cuts” explanation. . . Haiku “cuts” scenes, actions everything, and cuts time and language. So, though it is said that “cutting” is really omission, I think that “cutting” is at the same time the essential proposition of haiku.

This juxtaposition of images acts like a spark plug, making a connection and starting the “motor”—the resonance that takes readers on that magical journey. As with a spark plug, the gap between the two images juxtaposed in haiku should be neither too wide nor too close in order for the images to click and come together as a poem. (For a more detailed article on kire, click here.)

Gilbert is well known for his research into the practice of contemporary Japanese haiku, and that research, along with an examination of Modernism from Pound and the Imagists, has made him a strong advocate of the idea that disjunction most often explains how a haiku works … and how it works wonders. In his essay “The Disjunctive Dragonfly,” he says that “juxtaposition alone is not enough to confer poetic power. Incompleteness, absence, and ambiguity are necessary; these are among the properties propelling disjunction.” He goes on to describe the various literary-poetic techniques used to create disjunction, from overturning semantic and perceptual expectations to animating non-sentient objects. In that same essay, he urges the following:

    More than trying to achieve a “cut,” go for the “disjunction” to create that surprise and that magical moment that brings so much joy to the reader.

Examples of Link and Shift in Haiku

Combining all the various aesthetic tools mentioned above, we can see how they are encompassed within the technique of link and shift.

Let’s first look at this haiku by Jo McInerney:

summer storm
the windscreen wipers
slice our silence

As in mise-en-scène, three shots are very carefully selected and placed before the reader. As in montage, we see unconnected images (like film shots) cut and pasted to form a whole. This is also a lovely example of how the “cut” is used in haiku to show the juxtaposition of two parallel images. These nuanced techniques organically strengthen and layer the storytelling aspect of the poem.

summer storm: The reader is given a picture of a summer storm, which brings to mind the onset of the rainy season. As a reader, I can see myself out there in the open, viewing the sky. Is there a hint of a storm brewing in the minds of the people in the car, too?

the windscreen wipers: The second line actually puts me behind the steering wheel, or I might be a passenger. I hear the rapid movement of the windscreen wipers as they swish from left to right.

These first two lines create the scène in which the action will occur.

slice our silence: This is an amazing leap that takes us into the interior worlds of these two people – who might they be? A couple? A parent and a child? Perhaps people with some sharp difference of opinion? We are all familiar with such silences. The story is left unfinished for the reader to fill in the details. In haiku this technique is called the semi-circle, where some space is left for the reader to step in.

A tanka of mine will demonstrate how link and shift and layering between images work to convey, in 17 words, something that defines who I am against the backdrop of culture:

the aum
on our front doors
hers ornamental
and mine in plain wood
reveals us inside out

Let’s see where the breaks occur in this tanka. In lines 1 and 2, “aum” and “front doors” form the main keywords or setting — they situate the tanka, mise-en-scène, so to speak. Lines 3 and 4 cut away and go into the nature of the aum sign. Each line and image forms another layer (the montage effect) until we come to line 5, where I (the narrator) take you (the reader) into the cultural and geographical backdrop of my neighbor’s aum and mine: our different upbringings, how our inner worlds work. The shift in that last line, with its bit of disjunction, brings unity and completion to the poem.

Three years ago I experimented with another form of disjunction, superposition (the action of placing one thing on or above another, especially so that they coincide):

I dip my feet
in a river the river
joins the sea

The way I see it, three totally different images weave in and out of a 12-word poem:

I dip my feet
in a river

in a river the river

the river
joins the sea

Think back to the linking equation mentioned earlier (verse C links to preceding verse B and shifts away from verse A). In this poem, we have the feet at one end of the equation (A) and the sea at the other (C). On a larger scale, one small life (feet) is being connected to something larger, the cosmos (sea), through the steady flow of existence (river). By overlapping, the images create the necessary resonance: The narrator and her feet don’t literally join the sea, but the resonance shows how everything is connected, in the same way that “petals on a wet, black bough” provide a new way to see the crowd’s faces in Ezra Pound’s famous “In a Station of the Metro”—another poem that relies on superposition for its impact.

Examples of Link and Shift in Haibun and Tanka Prose

The method of link and shift throws some light on how storytelling can be enhanced when writing haibun and tanka prose as well. Juxtaposing or superposing ideas, images, and words makes more room for interpretation.

Before we look at examples, we should note that there are different kinds of linkage that can occur between the prose and the poem(s). In his book Renku Reckoner, John Carley describes the three tiers of linkage: word/object, core or content, and scent.

Kotobazuke — word links — and monozuke — object links — occupy the lowest rank,” he says. “These are forms of linkage predicated on the word choice or primary content of a verse. We are dealing with everything from crass puns to abstruse flummery [to] the simple association of one object with another.

“The middle rank,” he continues, “is composed of kokorozuke — core or content links. . .  [A]n added verse most often reads as an extension of the action or setting of its preceding verse, so forming a distinct pair. Despite some potentially ingenious twist, there is a narrative connection between them. Even where the link is more subtle and indirect, it remains amenable to understanding.”

Carley goes on to note that the third tier—nioizuke, scent linkage—was developed by Basho, who placed it uppermost: “Nioizuke evokes a much more tenuous set of associations, which are nowhere specified in the text itself. . . The reader is obliged to engage with the poem as an active interpreter.”

Scent links rely on connotations, in the same way that a flower might be conjured by its perfume. As Carley explains,

    According to Basho’s followers, Basho said he used this word (scent) to mean a link that operates without references to verbal or logical similarities, links that are impossible to predict, and rely primarily on mood, intuition and instinctive feeling. Scent links ultimately allowed Basho to link in ways that assumed that renku can attain a condition close to that of music.

In the haibun below, I have tried the “scent” link:

Aditya—The Sun God

I get away from the crowd, on to the top of a hill. On the other side is the peacock valley, where I see retired men sitting in groups, chatting their idle hours away.

A young couple passes me by. Suddenly, she stops midway, pulling his sleeves, saying, “Look, look! How beautiful!” I see a copper-red plate swiveling as it slips downward. Sheer vibrancy envelops the entire lake below in burning oranges and reds. A sacred moment, this twilight, perfect because it’s neither day nor night, neither light nor darkness and without a double, it has come to stay in my mind.

string of jasmine
        her plait in step
with her hips

I wrote this haibun in 2008, when I was still new to haikai lit and hardly knew much about link and shift. The haiku contains no immediate connection with what’s described in the text, but instinctively it felt right. I was struck by a string of jasmine in the young woman’s hair, swaying in step with her hips, perhaps conjuring the motion of a pendulum measuring time, or a censer perfuming the air. Yes, there’s a bit of wordplay (plate/plait), but the link goes beyond that. This poem captures a moment in time that, through intuition and the musical rhythm of the swaying jasmine, I tried to make timeless and sacred.

The following haibun by Cyndi Lloyd not only contains mise-en-scène, montage, juxtaposition, and superposition, but also is a strong contender for Basho’s “core” or “content” link:

Conditioned

the flooding
of all my wounds
buried shore

After high school, I join the United States Navy and spend the winter in Great Lakes, Illinois, training to be a hospital corpsman. A Uniform of the Day specifies the required outfit. Most days it’s Winter Blue: a polyester-blend fabric that’s supposed to be navy blue, but really is black — trousers, long-sleeved button-down shirt over a white T-shirt, socks, shoes, garrison cap, a black belt with a brass buckle.

My shipmates and I practice our skills on each other, checking capillary reactions, inserting IVs, bandaging wounds, feeling for distension, taking blood pressures, testing reflexes. We settle like crows, some of us lying on gurneys or the floor, others standing over each patient. Always, we watch each other.

Two guys practice on me. While one palpitates my abdomen, the other unbuttons my shirt to place the stethoscope over my heart, his wrist rubs my breast. Abdomen guy’s hands press toward my pelvis, traveling closer to the pubic bone. I freeze. Dad taught me not to fight or flee, telling me, be quiet, so we don’t get in trouble.

buffed floor
the sound of lake water
under frozen snow

For weeks, these guys practice their sleights of hand, sexually groping my body. I watch other girls being molested. Some of them freeze. Some giggle. A couple cry. Something ruffles inside me. Are my younger sisters at home sobbing?

chain of command
another footstep cracks
the ice

Multiple links and shifts are made in this haibun, not least among the haiku themselves. The first haiku sets the scene, foreshadowing the naval content in the prose with oceanic images (flooding, waves along the shore), but with a dark psychological undertone: those waves hide wounds—which we learn about by the third paragraph of prose.

In the second haiku, the motion of the waves along the shore resembles that of a buffer shining a floor (a typical job for a sailor), and the resulting shine can be superposed with that of the frozen snow on a lake. Here the haiku picks up on content in that third paragraph (“I freeze”) and on the sense of hidden danger and pain in the first haiku. It also hints at what could be a submerged memory, one that parallels the abuse suffered at the hands of her shipmates. The narrator, one feels, is on “thin ice” and could plummet into that pain at any moment.

That moment nears in the final ku, which brings back the image of ice. Now, however, it’s beginning to crack, the result of one heavy footstep after another. The steps are those not just of the naval chain of command, but also of others in her life (hinted at by the remembered words in her father’s voice — be quiet, so we don’t get in trouble — and the awful question the narrator asks herself — Are my younger sisters at home sobbing?). The word “chain” implies so many things: being bound, being held back, and also a continuing progression, as one commanding male figure after another continues the abuse. And once the ice cracks, so too will the memories come flooding — an echo of that first haiku. While the prose narrative itself is very powerful, the haiku and their leaps create an underlying resonance that drives home the pain and anxiety felt by the narrator.

For an example of link and shift in tanka prose, let’s examine this piece of Jenny Angyal:

Genius Loci

Along the winding, wooded path, May apples hide their white petals under leaves like green umbrellas. Dwarf crested iris splash the streambank with purple. And then a rustle in dry leaves draws my eye as a toad disappears into the duff. Her movement reveals two tiny clusters of rare “showy orchis”—pixie flowers on stems barely two inches high, each bloom with a lavender hood and a snow-white tongue.

Two days later finds me trudging back and forth along the same stretch of trail, wishing I’d made better note of landmarks as I scan the base of every promising tree trunk for the elusive orchids. I’m about to give up when, just as before, a rustle in dry leaves draws my eye. The toad hops twice and vanishes against ridged tulip-poplar bark . . . but not before she’s shown me the magic blossoms once again.

listening
to whatever spirit guide
is needed
at each moment
the mockingbird invents a song

Jenny is a master at using montage to layer her poems, which is done beautifully in this tanka prose, as image follows image along the wooded path. In both walks, the toad makes an almost supernatural appearance to point out the rare orchids. The tanka picks up on that narrative, first suggesting the speaker’s relationship to the toad:

listening
to whatever spirit guide
is needed
at each moment

and then pivoting with “at each moment” into the final shift, the shimo-no-ku:

the mockingbird invents a song

In the prose, the toad and “showy orchis” are superposed in the reader’s mind — as if the toad were magically transformed into the flowers. In the tanka, Jenny introduces the mockingbird, which through its call can transform into many creatures. The tanka connects intuitively to that same magic of discovery expressed in the narrative. By interweaving montage, juxtaposition, and superposition in a nuanced manner, she develops her storyline. To me, it is link and shift at its best.

Finally, let’s study this haibun by Roberta Beary.

TV PasTime

when the husband is home it’s police procedurals & serial killers.

up the night staircase
shadows of
framed ancestors

when the husband is away it’s lost puppy shows & soppy endings.

beyond
the ticking clock
       night narcissus

Roberta has used her inimitable style of brevity to utmost perfection in this haibun. The prose consists of just two parallel sentences. The first describes the husband’s television preferences — shows of violence, of law and order, in which violators are tracked down and, presumably, delivered over to justice. When he’s not there, the family — whether the wife by herself or with their children — apparently escape his domination of the television set and watch more sentimental shows. On their own, the sentences could be read as a humorous take on stereotypical views of male/female preferences, the split of head and heart. A reader might also detect underlying issues — a controlling husband, perhaps, who needs defined boundaries, or a wife who longs for something different.

The haiku expand upon those sentences and, through link and shift, create resonances that add nuance and meaning. The first haiku links to the prose through the idea of family but shifts back in time to the ancestors, picking up on the title and its graphical wordplay in “PasTime.” Through scent links —”night,” “shadows”— it hints at the dark crime shows and raises a question: is the husband bound by his lineage? Like his favourite shows, this haiku feels ominous —and that feeling carries over to the second sentence, helping to accentuate the underlying issues raised earlier.

“Night” reappears in the final ku, but now it modifies the flower named for the Greek hunter who fell in love with his own water-reflected image. In the myth, upon realizing his love could never be reciprocated, Narcissus died (or committed suicide) and turned into a flower. The haiku links to the prose by suggesting that the husband and wife/children watch shows that are reflections of themselves. It could also connect to the previous haiku, in how the viewer’s own reflection can be seen in the framed portraits. But the myth is generally one of unfulfilled love — and that, more than anything, lends its “scent” to the haibun. Through subtle links, shifts, and suggestions, Roberta infuses the blank spaces in this haibun with meaning.

To Sum Up ...

The Bhagavad Gita has a striking exposition of how consciousness, although we view it in different ways, is one. An often-used analogy is how electricity is one, but if you plug an iron into it, it gives us heat, while if you plug a refrigerator into it, it gives us cold. In the same way, I maintain that kire, juxtaposition, resonance, disjunction and superposition are all avatars of the same core principle. Although used in varying degrees of intensity, they all zero in on link and shift — the one powerful and dynamic technique that we need to master in order to grasp haikai poetry.

Author’s Note: My special thanks to Rich Youmans and Jenny Angyal for all the inputs and brilliant suggestions and for being with me through the writing of this article.

References:

Link and Shift: A Practical Guide to Renku Composition.” Researched and written by Tadashi Shôkan Kondô and William J. Higginson.

John Carley’s The Renku Reckoner.

Portions of this essay previously appeared in “the heart of haiku,” which can be found on the British Haiku Society website.

Credits:

“Frog”: Chinese ink & Xuan rice paper, by Kalpa MacLachlan
“summer storm”: Jack Stamm Award 2009
“the aum”: Skylark, 6:2, Winter 2018
“I dip my feet”: Moongarlic # 4, May 2016
Aditya – The Sun God”: Moonset, the Literary Newspaper, Autumn/Winter 2008
“Conditioned”: Unsealing Our Secrets, 2018, Ed. Alexis Rotella
“Genius Loci”: Contemporary Haibun Online, 13:4, Jan. 2018
“TV PasTime”: Haibun Today, December 2019

Wednesday, November 4, 2015

One Man's Maple Moon: Seed Tanka by Kala Ramesh

English Original

seeing the whole
blossom contained
in a seed
I look up to the sky
with all the stars

bottle rockets, 25, August 2011

Kala Ramesh


Chinese Translation (Traditional)


在一粒種子中
我看到
一整朵花
抬頭仰望
充滿星星的天空

Chinese Translation (Simplified)


在一粒种子中
我看到
一整朵花
抬头仰望
充满星星的天空


Bio Sketch

Kala Ramesh has published more than one thousand poems comprising haiku, tanka, haibun, & renku in reputed journals and anthologies in Japan, Europe, UK, Australia, USA and India. Her work can be read in two prestigious publications: Haiku 21: an anthology of contemporary English-language Haiku (Modern Haiku Press, 2012) and Haiku in English - the First Hundred Years (W.W. Norton 2013). She enjoys teaching haiku and allied genres at the Symbiosis International University, Pune.

Sunday, August 30, 2015

Butterfly Dream: Spring Breeze Haiku by Kala Ramesh

English Original

spring breeze --
               I catch the tune
she leaves behind

Heron's Nest Award, 8:2,  Summer 2006

Kala Ramesh


Chinese Translation (Traditional)

春風 --
     我了解
她所留下的曲調

Chinese Translation (Simplified)

春风 --
     我了解
她所留下的曲调


Bio Sketch

Kala Ramesh has published more than one thousand poems comprising haiku, tanka, haibun, & renku in reputed journals and anthologies in Japan, Europe, UK, Australia, USA and India. Her work can be read in two prestigious publications: Haiku 21: an anthology of contemporary English-language Haiku (Modern Haiku Press, 2012) and Haiku in English - the First Hundred Years (W.W. Norton 2013). She enjoys teaching haiku and allied genres at the Symbiosis International University, Pune.

Monday, June 22, 2015

Butterfly Dream: Liquid Twilight Haiku by Kala Ramesh

English Original

liquid twilight
the tilt of a water pot
on her hip

Frogpond, 31:3, Autumn 2008

Kala Ramesh


Chinese Translation (Traditional)


水樣般黎明
在她臀部上
晃動的水鍋

Chinese Translation (Simplified)


水样般黎明
在她臀部上
晃动的水锅 


Bio Sketch

Kala Ramesh has published more than one thousand poems comprising haiku, tanka, haibun, & renku in reputed journals and anthologies in Japan, Europe, UK, Australia, USA and India. Her work can be read in two prestigious publications: Haiku 21: an anthology of contemporary English-language Haiku (Modern Haiku Press, 2012) and Haiku in English - the First Hundred Years (W.W. Norton 2013). She enjoys teaching haiku and allied genres at the Symbiosis International University, Pune.

Sunday, May 24, 2015

One Man's Maple Moon: Rugged Moon Tanka by Kala Ramesh

English Original

an evening
of tangled thoughts . . .
through branches
even this rugged moon
looks tattered at the edges

American Tanka, 21, June 2012

Kala Ramesh


Chinese Translation (Traditional)

一個晚上
糾結的思緒 ...
透過樹枝
即使是這個凹凸不平的月亮
看起來它的邊緣都是破破爛爛的

Chinese Translation (Simplified)

一个晚上
纠结的思绪 ...
透过树枝
即使是这个凹凸不平的月亮
看起来它的边缘都是破破烂烂的


Bio Sketch

Kala Ramesh has published more than one thousand poems comprising haiku, tanka, haibun, & renku in reputed journals and anthologies in Japan, Europe, UK, Australia, USA and India. Her work can be read in two prestigious publications: Haiku 21: an anthology of contemporary English-language Haiku (Modern Haiku Press, 2012) and Haiku in English - the First Hundred Years (W.W. Norton 2013). She enjoys teaching haiku and allied genres at the Symbiosis International University, Pune.